Going home

[Ian]

I'd be interested in what folks think of this one:



Ian

[Pops]

Re: Going home

First impression is that it needed a lower viewpoint

[Ian]

Re: Going home

If I lowered the viewpoint I would lose the S-shaped meander of the path, or at least the connection from the bottom of the frame to the top I actually think the high viewpoint and modest telephoto fore-shortening is one of the assets of the composition. I have actually cropped out the top as there are some people right at the top of the frame, so a lower viewpoint would have brought these people into the top of the frame and that wouldn't have worked for me.

Ian

[Pops]

Re: Going home

Fair enough ... I guess you have to be there

[OlyPaul]

Re: Going home

The composition works for me Ian, but the colour for me is a big distraction from the subject , especially the fluorescent yellow bag and green verge sides. One for mono or duotone I think.

[Ian]

Re: Going home

Interesting, Paul - the colours didn't flag with me but maybe black and white could be a good option.

Ian

[Graham_of_Rainham]

Re: Going home

Several tried and tested constructional elements are present in this image which gives it a compositional appeal. The "S" curve, the subject on a third and the triangle of bags...

The coloured bags are for me importent references to the nature of the contents and hence the activity of the subject. The colour also adds considerably to what would otherwise be a Green-n-Grey picture.

In the past we considered a darker base as providing a solid base to the picture and I would probably have tried this to see if this worked better.

However the darkening of the top of the image, in the direction of travel, presents as a foreboding when associated with the title "Going Home".

There have been a lot of discussions in clubs about the way titles can work with or against an image by suggesting to the viewer something other than what is presented visually.

[Mowgli]

Re: Going home

The viewpoint helps add mystery to me, I also agree with Graham that a title can be misleading, as I wouldn`t have immediatly thought that was where she was headed. Is the area just in front of her knees whiter than the rest of the road or is this an illusion?

[Ian]

Re: Going home

Thanks Graham - yes the picture is definitely one of a question of gloom rather than optimism. This can be a difficult idea to make into an appealing image. It works for me, but then of course it would, wouldn't it!

Ian

[Ian]

Re: Going home

The viewpoint helps add mystery to me, I also agree with Graham that a title can be misleading, as I wouldn`t have immediatly thought that was where she was headed. Is the area just in front of her knees whiter than the rest of the road or is this an illusion?

You caught me out! I had applied some lightening there as the jeans were too dark. I hadn't noticed there was an associated glow until you pointed it out.

Ian

[ash]

Re: Going home

Potentially a good stock shot, plenty of room for text n stuff, needs brightening up a bit though oooo its seems like I was never away

Ash.